Someone pointed out that my translation was subpar and supplied alternate translations of the first 5 pages as proof. Here’s a fixed version with those changes, plus it’s all redone in the industry standard font (not counting background text and the like). The rest of the chapter is probably more accurate, possible exception of Ganeko bitching at Sanae, and even there I’m confident I didn’t put anything outright wrong that will be contradicted later.
Pretty cool of you to do an updated version, thanks again bro.
Thanks for making those improvements!
A few more little things to point out:
Page 7:
“trum card” -> “trump card”
Page 32:
Better to either shrink the font so that “hormones” can fit on one line, or use a line-wrapping hyphen to split the word.
Page 39, upper-left bubble, + the last bubble:
Even if it’s a rhetorical question, there should still be a question mark.
If you could make those tweaks, I think it would be worth submitting the v3 (or just this v2, if you’re inclined not to bother with the above) to mangaupdates, and ask them to correct your website URL while at it.
Also, thank you both for fighting the FOSS fight, and for recognizing when to concede a little bit of defeat there! ^^
(Actually, on second thought, scratch that “or use a line-wrapping hyphen to split the word” bit. Those bubbles are cramped enough as it is. For that matter, some of the other bubbles also have some uncomfortable margin spacing; but if this is your last release, I guess that’s probably not quite worth elaborating on.)
Thanks for this update and your effort 🙂
What happened, bro?
It was a ton of work for me to translate it poorly. Then another group released a couple chapters. It’s been a while since then, but hopefully they keep it up.
Working on re-scanlating the first volume of Hinamatsuri right now, with someone else handling the translation.